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Beautiful! :) I was very good, but I have to agree with the above. :? :)

Very good. Your should use some colors, and the nose looks a little big. :? But other than that, Its pretty good. :)

Nice poem, but it could use some work. I liked it. I liked your style. :)

Little confusing, and some of the stanza's did not make sense. But overall it was enjoyable. :)

I really liked the style. You did a good job. Is the title supposed Untitled, is it that on purpose? :? :)

Nice poem. I really didn't think there was any problem. You did a good job. :)

I LOVE Bacon :shock: :shock: :lol: Bacon is yummy. :shock:

Very nice. I am a big Legend of Zelda fan. I really liked it, good wording and conversation. But I'll have to agree with the above. :? :)

It is kinda long, but It was readable. :) I like it, But I'll say the same thing I said in Chapter 2. Although its in the Naruto world, try ...

All of the above! :lol: I have to agree with Ink on this one. Itachi being nice? :? Ayumi and the Byakugan? :? some of it was to unbelievable. Hope ...

I guess you saw what I said about Chapter 4. This one gave me an idea of what happened in the forth, but I'll still have to read the other. ...

Thanks Lucky. :D It was very sweet and heartfelt. But I have to agree with Meevs, it can't really be critiqued. :? It was kind of childish, and something I ...

Why hasn't anyone critiqued this? :? :lol: Well, I'll do it. It was very good, loved the story (I'm a Naruto fan! :D ) I didn't really see any mistakes, ...

I'm sort-of new, so I can see where your coming from. :) I'm still a little shy with writing here, but I have gotten use to it over time. Nice ...

Very good. It'll make a great story. Loved the wording and description. Write more! :)